Writer's · Block

I am in love with this piece. It took me a long time to do it and I just love how it turned out. The first half is all me, and the second half I used song lyrics/poems for the most part:
"The First Single" - The Format
"The Walk" - Imogen Heap
"The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock" - T.S. Eliot
"Over My Head" - The Fray
"Break So Easy" - Johnathan Rice
"Sick Cycle Carousel" - Lifehouse
"The Hollow Men" - T.S. Eliot

I'm looking to make it even better so please let me know what you think!! (Some of the formatting is lost because LJ sucks but you get the main feel so it's alright)

( Aphrodite's Downfall )

No light on the water
As I dove in alone.
Naked flesh yielding to
Icy crests.


Sunlight on the water
As I dove in with you.
Clothed flesh protected from
Cool ripples.


Moonlight on the water
As I dove in with him.
Undivided flesh enclosed by
Fervid waves.

It is as of yet untitled.


I saw the dim in your eyes
when I asked you the question.
Sometimes, I guess, we need to find ourselves first.
Maybe we just need a push before
we take the long-awaited plunge;
like novice divers on an overhanging bridge.
Because we both know the bottom of desire
but have yet to find the meaning of this.
Somehow I see a
Beginning and an End
Encroaching upon us with
Rapid ferocity.


I guess we won't have long to wait.

Finally, a new story! This was inspired by countless hours hating my job followed by conversations of dripping water with Daron and Kelsie. It was just a fun little thing to keep me entertained but I really enjoy it. Let me know what you think, and also, any title ideas would be great.

( Read more... )

Revised! Different tone, and I love this one better. Thanks Aaron!
EDIT: After reading it at the Blue Frog, I feel very happy with it. A lot of people liked it :-).

( Romeo )

I'm reading this tomorrow at the Blue Frog, but it needs a little bit of editing. Any help would be great! Also, I need a title, as the one I have now is annoying me.

( R&J )

My story was one of the few to be definitely accepted. We edited it a little more, and here's the final version. I'm very pleased with it and it's getting published, wooh!

( Elysium )

Another story! This one is influenced quite highly by Johnathan Rice's beautiful song "City On Fire".
( Lyrics )

You should really hear the song to get the full effect though. If you have itunes I can send it to you, just IM me. So here's the story, first draft so yeah, needs some editing. Let me know what you think :-). Also, I need a title. I don't want to call it "City on Fire", and I want it to have something to do with "Prometheus". Let me know if you guys come up with anything!

( Prometheus Story )

Thanks to Daron's suggestions, I tweaked the story a little bit and added an addition about the constellation Orion. I also just submitted it to Transition, so, hopefully it'll make it in :-).

( Elysium )

This one I wrote with the intention of submitting it to Transition, the literary magazine. This is the extremely rough draft as I just finished it 2 minutes ago and I wrote it in half an hour, so obviously it needs some editing but I wanted to put it up here and get any suggestions I could from people. Also, I'm not going to give you the meaning right now, so if you read it please reply and let me know what you think the meaning is, I want to know what I need to alter to make the meaning clear. Thanks!

( Elysium )

I edited the short story, The Hunt, that I wrote a few months ago. The ending is a lot different and more....sophisticated? The original I loved because it cracked me up and I had a grand time writing it, but no on really got it. Honestly, I didn't even get it. But, I have to present this tomorrow, so I wanted it to mean something. I took a good hard look at it, and against Aaron's judgments, decided to take most of the humour out. I still laugh at some parts, but it's not as blatantly funny as the original was. I think overall I like this version much better because it has an actual meaning and frankly, I'm just proud of it. Anyway, enjoy, and please comment, because I'm thinking of submitting this to the college literary magazine.

( The Hunt -- RENEWED! )

Please comment!

( Country Story Parts 5-8 )

It's crazy, but I like it. I wrote it for my Writing Fiction class and am going to change it a bit and broaden it. The inspiration for this was "The cock crowed at dawn", not to mention a deadline.
( The Hunt )

Hey guys, I've been itching to create a separate journal for my writings. This is definitely much more for me than for you but if you request anything for me to put up then I will. I'll mostly be putting up essays (as that's primarily what I'm writing at the moment) and on occaision movie/book reviews and on extremely special occaisions even parts of the book I'm working on. Feel free to comment on anything I put up, I'd love any praise or criticism :-).